CK Lynn

I liked this, but there were a few things that bugged me. 1) All the exclamation points! Half of them are unneeded and just look silly! 2)I ryhmed, then it ...

This was good, but you never explain who the "you" is. A parent? A boyfriend? It would make more sense if you did. Also, I thought the ryhme detracted from ...

Umm... this could be good, but I never understood who these "they" were. Since the television was on, I'm guessing they were like celebrities/actors and the poem was about not ...

Hi, i'd love it if you could do this poem

I think he needs more creepiness, but you got the insane look right.

This was an interesting piece. The way you talked about the girl (am I right in thinking she's a recovering anerexic?) liked she almost missed those days was different. The ...

I really liked this. You never tell explictly who (or what) the second guy is, which is nice, but the story would be better if you were a little less ...

Wow, this is really good. Seriously, I like to draw, but my hair always comes out looking like someone dumped overcooked linguini noodles on the poor person's head. I think ...

I really like that series, though the first book more so than the second. For me it rates somewhere after A Great and Terrible Beauty, but before Blood and Chocolate, ...

[quote]When I got home I told my dad all about it immediately[/quote] This is a little redundant. Maybe you could reword it. [quote]After all the problems I’d been having with ...

Cornelia Funke. I can't stand her.

~First Names~ Bekkoni Carson Williow Anastasia Dezi ~Last Names~ Hallows Hunter Jelkin Neve

Thanks for the crit! It was helpful.

You never asked about The two, razor-thin scars Criss-crossing my wrist, White as snow. But I'm sure you've heard about how I did it when I was thirteen, Standing over ...

You’re like a tyrant without manners. (does any tyrant have manners?) Don’t you have anything better to do? You crush the foundations that once were. You defined sorrow. Your victims ...